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Dolphineer
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Join Date: Jun 2008
Location: Wausau, Wisconsin, USA -- CST or CDT
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Fan of: PShPern BB, Tia., and Oth
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If you like it or not Feedback would be nice. Thanks
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Join Date: Mar 2005
Location: St. Louis
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It's a funny story, but I have to say it is hard to read because the grammar is so screwed up. In particular, you seem to leave out words a lot. Does your computer have a grammar checker? I'm not sure if that would help.
Also, just a hint regarding feedback threads: either ask for feedback at the end of the story, OR in a separate thread. Looks like you did both here! Please don't be discouraged from posting here, just keep in mind that you're trying to communicate and it's very difficult to receive the communication as it is.
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Dolphineer
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Join Date: Jun 2008
Location: Wausau, Wisconsin, USA -- CST or CDT
Pronouns: SheShe
Fan of: PShPern BB, Tia., and Oth
Now Reading: MHOP, Books Jerry Apps, Too Many to Post
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Non-fic: Campfire Coffee Story, the Creation of the Truck Stop/Norwegian Coffee | GinnyStar | Exhibit Hall | 3 | Sep 17 2021 10:11 PM |