Feedback: Poetry: Pain

[GinnyStar]

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[Anareth]

In the context in which you are using it, "may be" is two words.

It sounds like those really lengthy greeting cards they're selling these days that are sort of free-verse poetry. This one would be a sympathy card.

[GinnyStar]

Originally Posted by Anareth

In the context in which you are using it, "may be" is two words.

It sounds like those really lengthy greeting cards they're selling these days that are sort of free-verse poetry. This one would be a sympathy card.

I check it later, and yes it was a way to show my pain and sympathy at that time for my mother Nov. 1999 and my Mom's Brother July, 2000 just before we moved here to Wausau.

Unbe knowing to me I passed it on to another writer who told me it fit the bill, for a firend of his passed away from cancer and my poetry came at the right time. "sigh" I miss them both.

Its some what blocking my ablity to write anything with out wanting to cry, or be realy down in the dumps.

Its take something like that emotion to trigger my writing abilty, its my way of reaction to what going on around me.