Thread: Fan Fiction: Flight (A Pern AU)
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Old Apr 23 2009, 02:33 PM   #6
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Wow! Well done. I was almost afraid to read this because I was afraid that it would ruin their relationship. Well, in my eyes anyway. Instead......well, it strengthened it. And was done in such a way that it leaves Menolly stronger than she is before. He gives her acceptance without accepting what she is offering.

I do see what you mean about it repeating the ship scene. I thought it almost made the ship scene redundant, but it doesn't really. On the contrary, I think it is natural that at that moment of relief that Robinton is recovering, Menolly would again reach out to him in that way. And, having lived through your story, she wouldn't really feel rejected when he responds as he does.

Very moving and meaningful. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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