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Old Mar 7 2006, 01:18 AM   #3
ghyle
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Join Date: Nov 2004
Location: northeast New South Wales
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Fan of: Pern & Freedom
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Default Re: Feedback for Brenda's Pern Poems

Very enjoyable, Brenda. You're right about the Xmassy one: the death does tend to detract from the overall effect of the piece.

Otherwise, well done. Keep an eye on the rhythm, especially as they're "meant" to be sung to a basic tune.
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